That way, after reading the first paragraph, the reader would know the purpose, hypotheses, and findings.Next, the student described specifics about the research design, including the sample, instrumentation, and data analysis.That's why you'll see some fairly complex explanations in this paper on the data analysis but no information on the literature review. Within the sample, 118 (0.73) of the coaches were male, while 44 (0.27) were female.
A MANOVA was used to analyze the data for differences between male and female coaches with regard to leadership behaviors.
This is not consistent with the type of data collected.
The three coaching levels scored differently on three of the six behaviors: democratic behaviors, training and instruction, and social support.
High school coaches scored much higher than college level coaches in democratic behavior.
Ecological and population generalizability were discussed. The student spoke at length on threats to internal validity.
Following the information on threats to internal validity, the student provided suggestions regarding how these threats could have been dealt with. Not only does the student know what the weakness of the study are, he provides ways the study could have been improved. Investigating leadership, gender, and coaching level using the Revised Leadership for Sport Scale. The purpose of the study was to determine possible differences in leadership behaviors, using the Revised Leadership for Sport Scale (RLSS), between male and female coaches and among different coaching levels. The first hypothesis was that male and female coaches would respond differently to the RLSS in overall leadership behaviors.
While this is a good sample size, the problem lies with the distribution of the sample.
The sample number for junior high coaches, in particular, is rather low.
The student who submitted this paper last semester earned a 100 on his critique. A succint summary is provided in the first paragraph.
This paper would have been even better if the student had added a sentence or two about the results of the study.